Essay - prosím pomoc

Ahojky, mohl by jste mi prosím někdo překontrolovat tuto esej?:) Já sama v tom ty chyby ještě moc nevidím. Hlavně mi dělají problém členy a občas možná stavba věty, chyby v časech etc. Tak děkuji za každou pomoc.

Wedding day of my cousin.

6th July, 2013 – one of the most important day for my cousin.

At first the whole family came to bridegroom´s house where all of us had a breakfast. There were about forty people. In spite of the fact it was really hectic, everybody kept smiling on their faces and was happy for newly-weds. Of course, my cousin was totally nervous, but in a good way. After that friends of bride helped her to put on a beautiful white wedding dress , everything and everybody was prepared. We got started our cars and went to the church in Dobruška. When the bride came out a car everybody stopped talking for a moment and was absolutely amazed by her beauty. Then she started walking towards the church and looked absolutely gorgeous. It was an epic moment when they said yes to each other. It was absolutely perfect ceremony as well.

After ceremony afterparty was waiting for us. At first we had a lunch and then there were funny competitions such as unusual raffle, dancing, fireman actions and so on. Then there came musicians, so almost everybody started dancing, singing and simply enjoying that wedding party.

We got home about two hours in the morning – totally tired but with an amazing experience.

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• 6th July 2013 – one of the most important day of my cousin.
• In spite of the fact THAT it was really hectic…
• “After that friends of bride helped her to put on a beautiful white wedding dress ,everything and everybody was prepared.” → osobne by som túto vetu napísal takto: "The bride was given a hand with putting on a beautiful white wedding dress by her friends and everything was ready / prepared .
• “We got started our cars and went to the church in Dobruška.” → podľa mňa stačí STARTED A CAR namiesto GOT STARTED A CAR.
• “After ceremony afterparty was waiting for us.” → mi neznie dobre. Ja by som povedal After the wedding ceremony we went to the wedding reception. alebo The wedding reception was ahead of us after the wedding ceremony.
• “Then there came musicians, so almost everybody started dancing, singing and simply enjoying that wedding party.” → mi neznie dobre. Povedal by som: And finally, the musicians came and everybody started dancing, prancing, singing and to put it bluntly, we were enjoying it.
• “We got home about two hours in the morning…” → myslím si, že tam nie je potreba dávať HOURS, čiže stačí “We arrived home about four in the morning…” alebo “We arrived home about four o'clock in the morning…”

Aktuálne sa musím učiť na zápočty, takže nemám na to veľa času, nech to niekto ešte pozrie, opravoval som len to, čo som videl na prvý pohľad. Celkovo to nebolo až také katastrofálne (videl som aj horšie), niektoré štruktúry mi neprišli anglické, ale celkom fajn práca PS: Na členoch nech si zgustne niekto iný 

Děkuji moc za radu:)…a co mi doporučíte, abych se naučila ty anglické štruktúry?:)

Veľa čítajte, čítajte, čítajte (knihy, články, správy …) a všímajte si pri tom ako sú vety napísané, ako autor spája vety, vytvára súvetia apod. Precvičujte si gramatiku (cielene ju študujte), teda od časov až po ten posledný najmenší detail. Človek vie veľa pochopiť aj pri sledovaní filmov (počúva ako hovoriaci spájajú slová do viet apod.). Možností je veľa, treba si vybrať tú, ktorá vám najviac vyhovuje. Jednoducho, kde je vôľa – tam je cesta Držím palce!

Díky moc, jste hodný:)