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ANNOTATION This diploma thesis deals with children´s musical as educational means for working with children of primary schools. This thesis conducts a survey of the influence of creative dramatic on individual musical development, especially the development of musical skills. The theoretical part of this diploma thesis delimits the term “musical”. It briefly describes the origin of musical as a musical genre.

This diploma thesis deals with children´s musical as an educational means for working with children in primary schools. The thesis (conducts a survey of) describes/explo­res/assesses the influence of creative dramatic on individual musical development, especially the development of musical skills. The theoretical part of the diploma thesis (delimits ) defines the term “musical”. It briefly describes the origin of musical as a musical genre.

[Slovo “means” (prostředek) je počitatelné a je ok, lepší v dané kolokaci by bylo an educational resource/tool. “Conducts a survey of” (pořádá anketu) jaksi nesedí. Opakované “this” není na místě.  ]

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ještě bych se chtěla zeptat, zda by se dal název přeložit takto:

Dětský muzikál a jeho využití v hudebně výchovném procesu

• Children´s musical and its use in musical-educational process

Název “Children´s musical and its use in the musical-educational process” (process je počitatelné) je přijatelné, musical-educational nezní idiomaticky. Doporučuji

• Using children's musical in the music-teaching process
• The use of children's musical in (the process of) teaching music
• Children's musical as a resource for developing musical learning
• Children's musical as a resource for music-teaching
• Children's musical as a resource for teaching music

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mohu Vás ještě poprosit o kontrolu této části? Nejsem si totiž zcela jistá o správnosti použitých frází, členů a předložek

The aim of this diploma thesis is to find out whether the musical increases the interest in the pupils in/at the music class and if it leads to a/the development of their creativity. Children´s musical represents the means of the development of children's ima­gination and it helps pupils to get involved in the musical educational process and in that lies its potential for use in nowadays musical pedagogy.

The aim of this diploma thesis is to find out whether children's mu­sical increases the interest of pupils in the music class and if it leads to the development of their creativity. Children´s musical is a rich resource for developing children's ima­gination and a tool for actively engaging pupils in the musical education process, and in that lies its potential for use in current musical (pedagogy ) teaching.

• … whether the musical … is confusing: rozumíme určité představeni. Zde se mluví o musical všeobecně.
• Nowadays is (only) an adverb, not an adjective.
• “Find out” (poznat, dozvědět se) sounds a bit odd. After all, the author of the thesis already “knows” the answer, and selects his/her arguments and evidence to support that answer. May I suggest The aim of this diploma thesis is to assess the extent to which children's musical can increase … nebo The aim of this diploma thesis is to assess the value of children's musical in increasing … ?

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