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Ahoj, baví mě psát příběhy a už mnohokrát jsem to zkoušela anglicky, ale nic moc. Tak to opět asi cca po roce zkouším a mám z toho moc dobrý pocit. Opravuji přes jednu aplikaci, ale tak by mě zajímalo, jestli se to dá číst, je to srozumitelné a pochopíte, o čem píšu. Případně pokud mi napíšete chyby, budu ráda. Jak se naučit psát bez chyb? Hlavně moc nevím, kde se v angličtině píšou čárky. Moc děkuji za pomoc Tady je můj text:

My 16 birthday. It was good, maybe had some mistakes but I will never forget. I woke up with that idea in my mind and started planning my big birthday's party. Actually, I didn't know if it will happen but hope was with me. I lived only with my mum but we had a big house and usually with the mess inside. I had to make my mum be away during the party and that was the problem. You know, have a party with mum wouldn't be great and just. no. So step first: Make a house with no adult guidance. I got up at 7.00 am and prepared to school. First I used my wooden comb I had got last Christmas from mum and tried made something epic with my short hair. After few minutes of fighting with waves, I won and created a masterpiece! Okay, maybe not a master but good enough. I dressed up to a white t-shirt with an inscription “I love apples” and I sighed because no other t-shirt was clean. I took my old jeans and trying got out chewing gum, when I sat on it yesterday, I was waiting for a bus.

My 16 birthday. It was good, maybe it (musí být vyjádřen podmět) had some mistakes but I will never forget. I woke up with that idea in my mind and started planning my big birthday's party. Actually, I didn't know if it would (budoucnost v minulosti – měl by být posun času)happen but hope was with me. I lived only with my mum but we had a big house and usually with the mess inside. I had to make my mum be away during the party and that was the problem. You know, having a party with mum wouldn't be great and just. no. (tomu nerozumím) So first step: Make a house with no adult guidance. I got up at 7.00 am and prepared to school. First I used my wooden comb I had got last Christmas from mum and tried to make/making something epic with my short hair. After few minutes of fighting with waves, I won and created a masterpiece! Okay, maybe not a master but good enough. I put on a white t-shirt with an inscription “I love apples” and I sighed because no other t-shirt was clean. I took my old jeans and tried to get out chewing gum, when (zde bych spíš použil because) I sat on it yesterday while ( takto to dává větší smysl) I was waiting for a bus.

Moc krát děkuji a byl text i s chybami srozumitelný a pochopitelný pro čtenáře? 

Myslím, že celkově určitě ano.

Čárky viz Interpunkce: čárky v angličtině.

usually with the a mess inside

máma:
Mum
my mum
mum

So the first step / step one

prepared to school got ready for school

tried to make/making something

After a few minutes' fighting with waves…

maybe not a master-

I took my old jeans and tried to get off out the chewing gum I sat on it yesterday while I was waiting for a(the) bus.

Díky Franto za doplnění opravy, dosti jsem toho přehlédl.. Doufal jsem, že to ještě někdo další přejde, protože jsem si vskutku nebyl jist, že je opraveno úplně všechno.

Od prvního okamžiku hlasuji na začátku pro “16th birthday”